“129 Hours Before” #WIPpet Wednesday 8/2

First of the month again. Errands. Bills. Thank goodness the ends mostly meet these days. There’s no way to stretch our budget any more than we already do, but at least the important things are covered.

This week’s WIPpet Wednesday* comes again from Surrogate: Traditions, the third novel in the Surrogate Series.

Here’s my WIPpet math: 08/02/2017

201+87+20+0=308 words with enough added to complete things.

This WIPpet comes from Chapter Six “129 Hours Before.”

The Setup: Etain’s family is settling into some household changes.

     “I thought this was Stra’s night.” Mateo sat in one of the matching chairs in Etain’s den. It was late, Leigheas had already told them goodnight, and everyone was tired from rearranging their rooms. Diani Fash said he appreciated having his own space, but Ana— she still hadn’t returned home. Her guard had returned saying she was safe in New Slydrra Za, had a Dafan Dana guard, and was staying as the guest of one of the yaltans, but Etain still worried.

     “Mi Reina? Do you hear me?”

     “What?” They’d showered together after she’d sand scrubbed to remove the built-up skin on her elbows, but he’d had to help with her knees and ankles.



     “Ana’s fine.” Mateo reached across the table to take her hand into his. “She just needs time to understand herself.”

     “I know, but I worry.”

     “You’re her mother. It’s your job.” He squeezed her hand. “Why did Stra not want tonight?”

     Etain smiled when she remembered her and Stra’s welcome home for Leigheas the night before. “She and Leigheas both say we need bonding time.”

     “I appreciate it.” He leaned in to kiss her hand then leaned back to cast her a mildly amused expression. “So what, besides the obvious, do you like to do during the late evening?” He hadn’t tried to initiate lovemaking, but Etain’s back was sore enough for it not to bother her. Still, he was her new autalaci and lover, but their relationship had been so long in the making they’d already reached the point of quiet contentment when together.

     Late evenings aren’t a requirement for the obvious. “Depends. Leigheas and I generally read together. Stra and I—” She stopped when Stra’s form shadowed her den’s open door.

     “We talk or game more than we read, but we do obvious too.” Stra grinned at Mateo. “I’m spending time with Znyrs’ words then going to bed, Schatja, so may I have my goodnight kiss?”

     “Of course, my love.” Etain stood when she entered. “Thank you for checking on Analeigh for me.”

     “You’re welcome.” Stra kissed her mouth soft when she turned up her head. “Sleep well.” She stopped in the doorway. “Is tomorrow night’s family meeting adult-only or will the children be attending too?”

     “Adults, I believe. What do you think, Mateo?”

     “Adults. The kids should settle into the new arrangement before they’re allowed to complain.”

Catch up on all the Surrogate: Traditions WIPpet Wednesday posts HERE.


*WIPpet Wednesday is a blog hop hosted by Emily Wrayburn wherein writers share excerpts of their latest WIP. All genres and levels of accomplishment are welcome. The only stipulation is that the excerpt must coincide with the date in some manner. For example, on 10/8/14 you might share 10 lines from page 8, 8 paragraphs from chapter 14, or perhaps 18 sentences by doing WIPpet math and adding the day to the month. We’re flexible like that.




  1. These intimate moments are so lovely and (to me, anyway) very romantic. And I’m not really a romantic person! I just love the tenderness among the characters. That last line made me actually LOL.

    Liked by 1 person

    • I like depicting relationships through the characters’ simple interactions more than any other way. It’s more realistic, IMO. And the last line… the voice of experienced parenting.

      Liked by 1 person

  2. Ha! I love that last line. I agree with Mateo on that front. And as others have said, really enjoy the sweet interactions between these characters. 🙂


  3. That last line! LOL. Guess children are the same the universe over, huh?

    (Sorry this comment is super-late. I need to bookmark everyone’s blogs so I can find them if I’m too tardy to catch the links.)

    Liked by 1 person

Leave a Reply to jlgfellers Cancel reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.